Hello Mr. Rawles,
First, let me preface by saying I am not anyone in the movie industry nor am I anyone in the publishing field. I am simply a citizen who happened upon your movie script – “Pulling Through” [1] – and wanted to give you some feedback on what I thought of it. That said, I read it the other day and was totally hooked from the first scene onward. You began it with such an urgency, that to me, it was like the old Lay’s potato chip motto of “ya can’t eat just one”. What I mean by that is, one cannot stop reading from scene to scene. It has such a dynamic to it that it pulls in the reader from the very first scene. I read it straight through, except for the occasional interruptions [here] of the phone, kids questions, etc.
The characters are very well thought out. They each had a “quality” and “expertise” that helped build the storyline. Roland & Jennifer’s growing “relationship” made it a story of not only love and romance, but one of survival and urgency to get back together. And the “trek” that Roland had to make (on foot part way) from California to Idaho was a harrowing experience indeed!
I am a believer that your storyline will actually come true one day and be a true life experience for citizens of our country in the very near future. I have also been conscious of the NWO [2] since the early 1980s. I also have been an avid sportsman (hunter, fisherman, target shooter) since the 1970s and have been aware of the anti-gun “grabbers” (like Brady, Schumer [3], Kennedy, Feinstein, etc.)
for over two decades now. They are all making great headway with their firearms removal “agenda”, to put it politely. Our country is at a precipice (IMHO [4]) and is about to go over the edge of the cliff with respect to totalitarianism/tyranny/dictatorship. By your story, I think you would agree to that. As the old saying goes: “Those that do not learn from history are destined to repeat it!” Sorry, I digress.
Your story, when someone decides to place it up on the silver screen, will be an excellent movie for many a patriot to see. I only have one negative comment about it though. The ending. It was almost
“anti-climactic” in the abrupt way it was closed. While I was delighted that Roland and Jennifer made it down the aisle of matrimony, I was curious as to what happened to the others in the story. Where did they go? What did they do as individuals in the aftermath of the financial system collapse? How did they cope? I must admit, I was a bit “let down” at your ending. I got there and said to myself; “What? That’s it?” The story was just getting good (IMO [5]) and then bam, it was over. It left me with a feeling of needing just a bit more for it to be (IMO) a better finale!
Do I have any thoughts as to what that better “finale” might be? Nothing more then I already mentioned above. What did everyone do after the “[barter] ‘faire” & wedding? Was there more societal chaos? Did everyone come to grips with what happened and attempt to make a better form of government and monetary system? Were we re-established as a “republic” form of government? Was the “new” government and financial system better than the old one? I think a bit more “vision” and “imagination” on the part of the author would have been welcomed by viewers.
Well, sir, that’s about all I have to say. I liked it a lot. I feel privileged to be able to read your script. Thanks a lot for the treat. I cannot wait to see it in the theaters. Kindest Regards & good luck selling it, – P.L., Modesto, California
JWR Replies: Thank you for your kind comments. The reason that the screenplay storyline has some unresolved elements is because I loosely based it on just the first half of my novel “Patriots: Surviving the Coming Collapse” [6]. My intent is to eventually write the script for a sequel film, which shows the latter invasion/resistance warfare/constitutional restoration part of the story. Since you like the screenplay, I think that you will you also enjoy reading my novel. BTW, the “Pulling Through” [1] screenplay is available for free download for anyone interested in reading it. I also sell hard copies of the screenplay at just $1 over my cost, through Cafe Press [7], with the goal of getting the screenplay into the hands of movie producers.